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Satisfy the Hunger of Success

In the waves of life
When one has to strive
Everywhere thorns are scattered
Neither a chance to escape
Nor even chance to turn back
Like a Coward

When walls of relationship and patience get the cracks
Foe approaches along with a sword
Symbolizing the death
One even forgets his breath
When situation becomes more critical
Webs of sorrow trap
Unable to take a short nap
Makes to feel like crap
No time a Relax

But.. !
One who closes his eyes to struggle
With a sole judgment of right & turn
To dreams of success
One who determines
Definitely gets the illumination of divine
And one very day
The sun will rise
When heโ€™ll open his eyes
Will find himself
On the peak of success
To touch the sky
Who succeeded to
Satisfy hunger
Which even also tastes good


This Poetry is a part of Thursday Poet’s Rally Week 45

Happy Rally !! ๐Ÿ˜€


54 responses

  1. Very positive, very hopeful.. faith in self so much reflected. Niiice ๐Ÿ™‚

    June 9, 2011 at 20:51

  2. Simply encouraging and hopeful. Kudos to you.

    June 9, 2011 at 20:13

  3. Great write! The struggle is never much fun, but it is all worth it when you succeed!

    June 9, 2011 at 06:59

  4. A very optimistic poem, always good to be reminded that things will turn out for the better eventually. The words had an almost rap like lyricality to them. One problem, the white words and the background don’t mix, the contrast isn’t strong enough, I found it a bit hard to read. Brilliant poem.
    The Lonely Recluse.

    June 9, 2011 at 04:56

    • Thanks for the comments man !!
      Well actually, The WHITE font what you are saying is a default setting of this theme …
      ya I would change the background sooner in order to make it kinda readable for y’all !!
      again Thanks for the Feedback !! ๐Ÿ˜‰

      June 9, 2011 at 08:12

  5. The hard work and perseverance as one strives to achieve one’s goals is often a hard pill to swallow; oh, but the taste of success is sweet indeed, Staccato, but also lyrical in style, I like the flow of this.

    June 8, 2011 at 20:34

  6. I love the whole idea of the “Hunger of Success.” An interesting subject with a fascinating take on it!

    June 8, 2011 at 19:29

  7. ahenda

    very spirited and deep!!! i like!

    June 8, 2011 at 16:49

  8. YungYoof

    True words, rewards are all the more sweeter when we strive. Love it! ๐Ÿ™‚

    June 8, 2011 at 16:24

  9. Sam

    Well written poem with a lot of spirit within…

    June 8, 2011 at 12:53

  10. misssarawithoutanh

    Beautiful. Very inspiring.

    June 8, 2011 at 11:27

  11. Life is always going to present obstacles but perseverance and optimism can bring success. Good one, Ashish!

    June 8, 2011 at 10:03

    • Thanks for your brilliant worthily words !!

      June 8, 2011 at 14:13

  12. ~L

    I will :). Stop on by to check out y stuff too… A bit heavy but it’s poetry… Mostly

    June 8, 2011 at 09:56

  13. ~L

    Loved each line:) I’m ready to read some more of your stuff:)

    June 8, 2011 at 09:46

    • Keep on Visiting further .. while I keep on brining such nice things for ya !! ๐Ÿ™‚

      June 8, 2011 at 09:52

  14. A good rap and good luck in reaching your goals!

    June 8, 2011 at 08:54

  15. Very good! reads very lyrically…this could be a great song

    June 8, 2011 at 04:19

  16. a lovely flow and nicely rhymed

    June 8, 2011 at 01:40

  17. Very well said.

    June 7, 2011 at 19:58

  18. I would rather say: enjoy whatever you do and success will come… The way you put it is good for the beat, I suppose! ๐Ÿ™‚

    June 7, 2011 at 16:23

  19. :] Once I read it as a rap I wanted to read it over again. :] xx

    June 6, 2011 at 22:04

    • Keep on reading and Keep on visiting here .. !! ๐Ÿ˜‰
      and Thanks !!!

      June 8, 2011 at 07:41

  20. its a wonderful poem. reflective.

    June 6, 2011 at 19:19

  21. Nicely written..
    Well rhymed. ๐Ÿ™‚

    June 6, 2011 at 17:55

  22. True… Those who never give up and believe in themselves always win! A powerful one!

    June 6, 2011 at 16:03

  23. Ummm… I liked it. Starts with a pessimist tone but ends in optimism! Quite good.

    Thanks for visiting me and your blog is good.

    June 6, 2011 at 12:48

  24. Ina

    It is a rap, quick and smooth, with deep thoughts! And very well done! ๐Ÿ™‚

    June 6, 2011 at 11:36

    • Well I started like a poetry .. and ended like a rap ๐Ÿ˜›

      June 6, 2011 at 13:41

  25. ” … Everywhere thorns are scattered …”

    Yes, they are – but the thorns help us appreciate the beauty of our accomplishments when we work through, around, under or over the obstacles in our path … also the lessons we learn are invaluable for the marathon! Nicely done!

    June 6, 2011 at 09:24

    • Thanks for all those kind words ..

      June 6, 2011 at 13:45

  26. very well composed.

    love the word flow, it is fun to read aloud,
    Happy Rally.


    June 6, 2011 at 05:28

  27. When walls of relationship and patience get the cracks
    very nicely done…

    June 6, 2011 at 05:12

  28. Effective use of rhyme here.

    May 31, 2011 at 22:33

  29. beautiful words…

    inspiring and impressive entry.


    May 31, 2011 at 21:40

  30. A.B. Thomas

    Great write!

    May 31, 2011 at 20:51

  31. Amazingly written, I really couldn’t stop even a moment till I finished…well written
    “To dreams of success
    One who determines
    Definitely gets the illumination of divine”
    postive and inspirational.

    May 31, 2011 at 11:22

  32. Great job I enjoyed the first and last stanzas particularly =)

    May 28, 2011 at 13:35

  33. Lovely last stanza.

    May 26, 2011 at 08:46

  34. Success is not the only thing that tastes good:)Liked this poem:)

    May 25, 2011 at 11:19

  35. Its a good poem, especially enjoyed the last stanza.

    May 25, 2011 at 04:06

  36. Liz

    Words of hope showing us that the protagonist will get there! I enjoyed your write.

    May 24, 2011 at 07:25

    • Thanks for the reviews !! ๐Ÿ˜‰

      May 25, 2011 at 09:14

  37. dynamic and smart words.
    Thanks for sharing….


    May 23, 2011 at 20:40

  38. “When walls of relationship and patience get the cracks”

    Sometime we allow ourselves to be broken down with so much passion.

    Love this poem!

    May 23, 2011 at 20:17

    • Glad u’ve liked it .. Thanks !! ๐Ÿ˜‰

      May 25, 2011 at 09:12

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